tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2703135896090475473.post1872139080223495001..comments2024-01-03T15:44:32.214+11:00Comments on Anthony J. Langford: July Novel Month - Novel No. 4 - R.I.P. Rest In PrimeAnthony J. Langfordhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02027216695415849158noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2703135896090475473.post-71464821843749312692011-08-22T09:56:18.202+10:002011-08-22T09:56:18.202+10:00Thank you N. I think this is a pertinent issue in ...Thank you N. I think this is a pertinent issue in many places in the Western world right now. It's a growing burden. Perhaps if we adopted some of the practices from other countries who take care of their elderly, we wouldn't have this problem. I think we will see more elderly staying with relatives a lot longer. It's just not affordable, nor sustainable. Unless there is major change.<br /><br />Cheers.Anthony J. Langfordhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02027216695415849158noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2703135896090475473.post-54698202698683431502011-08-22T09:54:32.707+10:002011-08-22T09:54:32.707+10:00Hey Anthony. I will be going through some of your ...Hey Anthony. I will be going through some of your older posts in the coming days since I am new to your blog and still haven't read the old stuff. Hope that is alright with you. I know for some writers after they write new material they progress so much that the older works don't seem to measure up, but still I like reading older writings to see how the writer has grown and evolved. In a way it gives more raw insight into the writer's personality, I really enjoy that.<br /><br />This particular post reminds me of an article I was writing recently about the US loans and budgets. Since Social Security, MediCal, etc. are federal insurances that people pay into, essentially it is all money that the government may need to pay back in future. So the US government is not only living off money borrowed from China, it is also living off money borrowed from its own people. I don't blame senior citizens if there is a lack of senior benefits in future, the citizens are victims of this compulsory insurance policy that they are forced to pay into even though much of it seems to be based on false promises. But yes as per your post, the effects are going to trickle down to the youth as well in future.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2703135896090475473.post-43987462037060186642011-08-16T10:25:40.001+10:002011-08-16T10:25:40.001+10:00Hey Anthony. I will be going through some of your ...Hey Anthony. I will be going through some of your older posts in the coming days since I am new to your blog and still haven't read the old stuff. Hope that is alright with you. I know for some writers after they write new material they progress so much that the older works don't seem to measure up, but still I like reading older writings to see how the writer has grown and evolved. In a way it gives more raw insight into the writer's personality, I really enjoy that.<br /><br />This particular post reminds me of an article I was writing recently about the US loans and budgets. Since Social Security, MediCal, etc. are federal insurances that people pay into, essentially it is all money that the government may need to pay back in future. So the US government is not only living off money borrowed from China, it is also living off money borrowed from its own people. I don't blame senior citizens if there is a lack of senior benefits in future, the citizens are victims of this compulsory insurance policy that they are forced to pay into even though much of it seems to be based on false promises. But yes as per your post, the effects are going to trickle down to the youth as well in future.nadeemalimhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15001011080989414552noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2703135896090475473.post-41773035138468750682011-07-29T21:16:00.655+10:002011-07-29T21:16:00.655+10:00Thank you for your analysis Gina. It's very mu...Thank you for your analysis Gina. It's very much appreciated.<br /><br />I understand what youre saying about the subjective view. It's purpose was to pinpoint what was to come. When you submit to a publisher, if you can get beyond the 'query email', all they want is the first few chapters and the novel doesnt begin with the revolution. If the book was published, some of this extra information would be on the back cover anyway, so I would probably remove that line.<br /><br />Crusty's is indeed a nasty term... and this is the point. We've all been young and I've known people who have said they would rather die than grow old and it's this type of mentality which (partly) inspired the story. <br /><br />I too am outraged, particularly when I hear of crimes by the young against the old as does happen, those cowards who target the weak. And of course, the shoe will inevitably be swapped to the other foot, something they are too shortsighted to see.<br /><br />I think there is much to be discussed from this book and it would be a terrible waste and a missed opportunity if it weren't published.<br /><br /><br />Thanks again Gina.Anthony J. Langfordhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02027216695415849158noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2703135896090475473.post-43450759103415069752011-07-27T20:54:49.275+10:002011-07-27T20:54:49.275+10:00The problem with Revolution is that not all of its...The problem with Revolution is that not all of its participants are willing. Or even aware that it has begun.<<< I would omit this as an opening because it assumes a subjective stance from the writer. (Then again, it might be intentional)<br /><br />Your use of numbers as digits is interesting, but for an old soul like me my preference is to use the word "one" and not "1". Then again, I understand it as an expression of a time your story is in. <br /><br />Your use of word "Crustys" is harsh, disrespectful and almost politically offensive. Clearly "Crustys" are symbolic of a scourge the earth is now filled with, and in which the young have to support. God forbid! Never mind that the "Crustys" are the ones that gave birth to the "young."<br /><br />Do you really want a future in which the young refer to you as a CrustiFuk?<br /><br />Overall, you have created a very good visual in the delivery of this story. The use of "strong" words such as "Crusty" and the use of numeric's is reflective of a future time and place. Instantly I am transported into a realm that is the opposite to what I am familiar with and I am at the same time, outraged by the "youth" of this realm who have created a world in which they set the rules. <br /><br />It is intriguing and it demonstrates a reflection of the kind of world in which we are slowly heading toward if we don't make careful consideration of the aged and the weak. After all, even the young one day will become old "Crustifuk's." LMAO!<br /><br />GinaAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2703135896090475473.post-33395983525675642552011-07-22T13:09:59.242+10:002011-07-22T13:09:59.242+10:00Thanks for your comment Graham.
I think this issu...Thanks for your comment Graham.<br /><br />I think this issue is especially right now and it would be great to get the book out there. The majority are usually led by the few, especially if you take away their rights. <br /><br />You raise a good point about alternating chapters, however events in Part 1 influence those in Part 2, though some characters do cross over. Chronology wise, it can only work this way.<br /><br />And yes, you're absolutely right. It is about age and numbers....<br /><br />Cheers for dropping by.Anthony J. Langfordhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02027216695415849158noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2703135896090475473.post-20595862473259152242011-07-21T16:54:48.537+10:002011-07-21T16:54:48.537+10:00I found the use of numbers ie 2, 4, instead of two...I found the use of numbers ie 2, 4, instead of two and four interesting. Was that deliberate? ie it is all about age and numbers? <br /><br />Bit of an overuse of "the" I thought. <br /><br />Rather than writing the story in two parts have you thought about having one chapter young, the next old and so on - because my immediate reaction to the first part of the story is to get the old persons point of view. <br /><br />At the moment in Australia, the old person or baby boomers view of the world rules - simply because of their numbers, so I would be interested in seeing how they let their will be subverted by the smaller number of young in the story.Graham Clementshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06430135062211828206noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2703135896090475473.post-28836757121019217042011-07-18T12:20:30.916+10:002011-07-18T12:20:30.916+10:00You're a brilliant mind, my friend. I'm ke...You're a brilliant mind, my friend. I'm keeping fingers crossed for you always.<br />xoRobynRawknrobyn.blogspot.comhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15997241410192066577noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2703135896090475473.post-30556008505201912662011-07-16T16:32:12.656+10:002011-07-16T16:32:12.656+10:00Thanks so much Arielle. I hear what you're say...Thanks so much Arielle. I hear what you're saying. Long books are rarely published these days, unless by a established succesful author. people have less patience these days. I write fairly sparingly as it is. I don't write long descriptions but you do need to establish scenes and characters. It's a balance.<br /><br />And yes, its a big business now and much harder for writers. Couldnt agree with you more.Anthony J. Langfordhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02027216695415849158noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2703135896090475473.post-74176836038054583942011-07-15T20:15:26.596+10:002011-07-15T20:15:26.596+10:00Hi Anthony! I have to stongly desagree with the fi...Hi Anthony! I have to stongly desagree with the first comment. That's the new deal with publishers. Cut, cut, cut. To the point where you can't understand a thing. It's a rip off to the writter and his fans. I guess mr Anonymous didn't read Proust! " A la recherche du temps perdu ".. One book, 6 volumes, about 2400 pages! But that's the key. The key to a work of art. PERTINENT details are essencial. they say a lot about you through the characters. It's important for the reader. It's like the book starting with a funeral. If it works in the movies why should it be suicided in a book? this is BS! The publishers want a great deal of money on 50 pages! it doesn't work. yes, they're saving money, and destroying the writer's soul. Because that's what a book is all about! <br /><br />Bigs Hugs ! <br /><br />ArielleAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2703135896090475473.post-90888173547522393722011-07-15T10:21:43.438+10:002011-07-15T10:21:43.438+10:00Thanks so much for dropping by. It's great to ...Thanks so much for dropping by. It's great to hear what others think and I'm always open to criticism. <br />Thank you for your feedback. And let's hope I can get it into a publisher's hands. I think the subject matter is pertinent to issues being raised now.Anthony J. Langfordhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02027216695415849158noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2703135896090475473.post-14086021843352256752011-07-14T17:43:52.931+10:002011-07-14T17:43:52.931+10:00Great concept and I like the way you have opened. ...Great concept and I like the way you have opened. Good descriptive words that transport me there. I wonder though if it would be worth cutting back on the words it seems a little busy it feels like it should be a little more bare which would make it more frightening it just feels a bit busy in a few places for example the second last sentence feels too long and I am nit sure whose standing form is being sensed. Great work though and can't wait to read more when it's published.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com